A bit short, and one glaring misuse of a word (Not a misspelling), but it's a start. As you write more, you will improve, and there are numerous stories on this, and other sites, that have been written by some really good writers, and from which you can draw pointers and maybe even inspiration.
With practice, you'll learn how to take what you wrote (one paragraph), embellish it into a page and a half, maybe two pages, and keep it interesting throughout.
Writing is an acquired skill, and like any acquired skill, it requires practice to become proficient. You've started. Now, do some more at your own convenience.
One of the added benefits, is that you will learn the language, and knowing how to speak and write, will take you far.